After I read the story "High Dive", there was one thing that got my attention at the very beginning, and that was the foreshadowing. I liked how they had her on the diving board about to jump and then re-winded back to earlier that day. It let me know what was going to happen and it got me interested and kept me reading. I also liked how Marni used the "swan" lesson in her story. It helped me imagine her brother, Jimmy, in my head as I was reading this, trying to give her advice on how do do a high dive. Another reason why I liked why she brought up the "swan" lesson was because I wasn't quite sure what a high dive was, but when the "swan" was brought into the story it helped me understand what she was talking about and trying to do.
In the "Journey Chapter" I think that how she includes her past story telling experiences works best in this. It helps you understand a little better about what she is trying to say. It is hard to decide what to cut out of this because there is so much important information in it. She really teaches you how to develop a oral story and tells you how her stories have changed and improved over time. I also liked how she included her audiences reaction to the story and how that effects how she tells it. It was interesting to read about how each class she talked to liked something different, One class really like the "four andthreequarters" and another class really liked the "life guard with BIG muscles". If I really had to cut something out of this I would shorten up the "Reliving and Recording the Tale " section. I feel like that section sort of drags on and I kept losing my focus on it. Specifically the little details that seem unnecessary. This has so many details to begin with, it seems to over do the details a little to much. The part about her talking to Doug and reliving the fall was really good and interesting, but I don't think that she would need anymore that just that in this section.
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